IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5

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The essay addresses the task but lacks a clear thesis statement and has several grammatical errors. Coherence and cohesion are affected by awkward phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices, while vocabulary is basic and repetitive.
Overall score5.0
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Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors59
Grammatical range and accuracy22
Lexical resource28
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Task response4

Writing Task

#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?

Submitted Answer

Words343|Paragraphs6
English:UK English
Global Issues:
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Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
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Paragraph 1 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
Recently, most of the
countries
, governments
spend
significant
rources
on promoting national culture through
types
of
festival
what they have in their
countries
, museums, and public television
progrmas
.
Yes
of course , I agree with this statement and
i
will explain the reasons why I believe this
statment
and I will give the advantages and disadvantages for this matter through this essay.
To begin with,
every
countries
do
the promotion to
publized
their national
cuture
to the whole
world
, to know their
behaviroal
patterns, learn about them, and also
publizesd
to their beliefs as
well
. Therefore, they use as methods to promote their culture
such as,
festivals,
museums ands
television programs.
So, the
world
seeing those items and the places they will motivate to travel
those
countries
enjoy their life with that
world
famous
places and festivals as
well
. Not only
that
but also,
pepople
can learn about other
countries
from watching those special programs
counducting
and
producing
by the
countries
governmanet
.
Moreover, as an example,
most
famous tourism
countries
is France. They are showing their
life style
, their beliefs, and so on, using their one of the
world
famous
and biggest Eiffle tower, the Louvre museum, and also the
notre-dame
chathedral
of Paris church as
well
.
Considering about those
areas, the main
adavantage
is the government can earn money from
that
tourists and use
those money
to develop their
countries
developmant
.
On the other hand, the bad situation of this matter is, the people who
visits
the
countries
and behaving as irresponsibly. For instance, some people
throwing
their
trash
to
the road and then the road will be messed with that
trash
. There are
lof
of bad situations happen when tourists come to visit the
countries
.
To
summerize
this discussion, if the
governements
welcoming tourists via promoting their national cultures they should organize the facilities to the visitors to enjoy their journey, and as
well
as the people who acting as irresponsibly they must
be punish
and enact a law to pay a fine according to their bad
behavior
and so on.

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