IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in argumentation and has several grammatical errors. Improved coherence and a more formal tone would enhance readability and overall effectiveness.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 28 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Online education offers unprecedented flexibility in terms of time and place of study, contrasting with the structured discipline of traditional classroom settings.
To what extent do you agree or disagree that the flexibility offered by online education is more beneficial than the structured discipline of traditional classrooms?
#Online Education
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
flexibility
to conduct the study from everywhere and anytime become a plus point compared to traditional classroom where it required
specific settings. Some proponents to
this way of learning believe that it is more beneficial than classroom studying, I partially agree with them and I will elaborate my view in the paragraph below.The main advantages of online learning is the
flexibility
in terms of time and place of study. Pupils are given the freedom to decide, and it is a good strategy so the pupils can schedule their time more effectively. For example, some children
experience hardship to study
in the morning while the others are not, this flexibility
can be solution to this problem. Next is efficiency.
schooling
from home can save the parents some bus and pocket money, moreover it can also save travel time.Even so, there are also
drawback
enrolling
the children
to
this education system. Lack of discipline, social and access can hugely impact the development of children
. First, without no adult is around, it is hard
to monitor the child
behaviour during the class. Conversely, traditional classroom offers behaviour correction. Second, school is also a place where children
learn to intereact
and socialize, this skill is really important
in adulthood. Third, it relies heavily on the internet access where it can be very unfavorable
sometimes
.In short, both approach of studying
has
their own advantages and disadvantages with regard to its flexibility
, efficiency, discipline, social and dependancy
.