IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and the essay should be more cohesive and coherent to achieve a higher score.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 38 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 19 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Investing in technology can be seen as essential for a country's development and competitive edge.
How crucial is government spending on technology? What benefits does such spending bring?
#Government Spending
#Direct Question
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:225
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
technology
are
important
part of our life
in various domains (such as school, our daily life
, etc.). Investing in technology
is also essential, valid for our country's development and competitive edge. In my opinion
government spending on technology
is very crucial and brings a lot of benefits. Just imagine a country, which government spends enough money and time in
technology
- a country seemingly becomes a modern and perfect one.First of
all
various technology
can improve
your daily life
. Japan is known for its technology
in areas such as electronics, automobiles and robotics and
it shows how living in Japan is comfortable. If everyone would drive
an electromobile
, the weather would be much more cleaner
and would improve
people
's health. Many robots could aid us doing various houseworks. Important is just combine
technology
and nature. We can not
let robotize everything but
we can try to achieve a better life
for people
.Second of
all
with investing in technology
we can educate more and more people
. Just imagine modern museums with interesting interactions that achieve visitors attention quickly, easily and effectively. Also
in schools
modern technology
can improve
your educational knowledge and expand it if tools are entertaining, interesting.Missing Linking Devices
shows
that government spending on technology
is very significant and with it
we can improve
our people
's lifes
.