IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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The essay addresses the question but has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Coherence and cohesion are moderate, with some ideas not fully developed or logically connected. Vocabulary usage is adequate but lacks variety and precision.

Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy4.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors29
Grammatical range and accuracy9
Lexical resource11
Coherence & cohesion5
Task response4
Question
Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults. Thus, it is better to learn languages in childhood.
Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
#Education
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:263
Paragraphs:4
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Grammar Range
Ideas Development
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Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
Nowadays, some adulthoods are
overally
less successful in
learning
foreign
language
than
children
. From my perspective, I would
learn
towards with such a view and will analyse in the following way.
First,
children
have much
time
than adults in
foreign
language
studies
. This is because that
children
are curious to explore the new knowledge. Adults spend
time
as much as
children
, but they are up to their ears with their career paths. This can lead grow-up can lose their memories in long
time
. One good example is studying English,
children
at the age of three to ten can have much
time
to
learn
and communicate their
language
with their foreigners to enhance their speaking skills and English
vocabularies
.
Another key
advantages
of
children
learning
foreign
languages
is having a good
study
method with rich imagination. This is the reason that they also believe the untrue stories and spend much
time
discovering
the everything
around .This can lead
children
can fabricate diverse and rich stories during
foreign
studies
to be better in
learning
their
voucabulary
. Furthermore,
the
grow-up always believe the
truth
so it is difficult for them to find the vocabulary
study
methods. For instance, if Vietnamese adults want to study Chinese or Thailander
language
, they have to practice every day
in
a long period to
learn
by heart.
In conclusion, while the numerous individuals
disgree
that everyone for all ages should
learn
the
foreign
language
, I firmly believe that
all of people
ought to study the
foreign
language
as soon as possible to access the success in the predicted
future