IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in argumentation. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic and contain errors, while coherence and cohesion need improvement for better readability.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 30 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Global interaction often leads to cultural exchange, which can result in both enrichment and dilution of individual cultures.
Do you agree or disagree that the benefits of cultural exchange outweigh the risks of losing cultural uniqueness?
#Culture
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:239
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
people
in all around the world has
more
and more
interaction with each other
through the internet
and talk about their culture
. Some people
says
the good side of culture
exchange
brings to us can outweigh the risks of losing cultural uniqueness. There are points for and against this statement, but overall
I agree with this idea.First of all,
culture
exchange
will help
people
to gain more
knowledge about the other
culter
around the world. That action easily help
people
to learn more
things that they have never known while chatting with someone through the a
website on the internet
. For example, an
European can get some information about the African when talking to some African through some website.Another point is that global interaction can
help
their country
grow better. If you chat with your international friends about your nation's culture
, your friends might get interest and spread it out to their relatives and
maybe they will come to your country
to visit. For instance, some visitors from other
countries
came to Thailand because some foreigners told them about the good things of
Thailand on the internet
.Overall, I agree with the idea that the benefits of
culture
exchange
outweigh the risks of losing cultural uniqueness. I think if we can continue this, in the future, we will have no more
discrimination and people
will become more friendly and have different thought
about other
country