IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks a clear personal opinion and examples, affecting task achievement. Grammar and vocabulary are basic, with some errors, and coherence and cohesion could be improved for better readability.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 23 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 6 |
Question
Many people believe that music is just a form of entertainment, whilst others believe that music has a much larger impact on society today.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
#Entertainment
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
people
do remote work and study from home and
they want to entertain their self at home while others think that music has bigger impacts on society. This essay will discuss
both views.On one hand, a catchy music will
easy
to engage people
to listen more. When someone feels gloomy or stressed, they will vibing
to music that is giving serenity into their problems to relief their stress. The other
reason why music is to entertain us is somehow the lyrics are related to our current conditions. Whether it broken
hearts, falling in love, or admiring someone. In other
words, music become a comforter that can not
be done by other
people
.However, many others think, music bring a special impact to some community and
preserving
culture
. As we can see, people
with the same preference genres or taste of music will build a community to gain more of its fans whilst it can increased
social skills by interacting with other
people
they have met. The similar purpose of music is also to preserve
the culture
whether it is east culture
or west culture
. Both have the same purpose to preserve
their own characteristic in music.To conclude, although many
people
seen music as an entertainer to their life, for the others, it is a chance to develop social skills and growth communities. Therefore, music also used to preserve
culture
which is acceptable in society.