IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
6.0
Overall Score
24 Jul 24, 17:43
Want to practice this question?
Go to IELTS Essay Checker
Overall Feedback
The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in idea development and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could be improved for better clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 22 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:252
Paragraphs:5
Formality
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
many
governments around the world believe that they should devote more resources to developing and promoting
their culture
through festivals, museums or television programs.In fact, this
also
brings
efficiency but also
has
many
potential disadvantages that make countries
have to consider before taking action.The major disadvantage of
promoting
national cultures
is their inaccessibility to certain sections of society. Because the majority of young people today tend to pay little attention to their country
's traditional
culture
, have no interest or feel bored. They are influenced by the culture
of developed countries
and find it difficult to leave. Next is that traditional
culture
can face great competition from other, larger cultures
. A typical example is Korean culture
that thrives in Asia, especially they know clearly the advantages of their culture
are movies and music.However,
promoting
culture
also
brings
many
benefits to the country
. Specifically, traditional
beauties will be more accepted and gradually approached by many
younger generations, promotion through festivals, museums as well as television
will bring
a source of revenue that will contribute to the economy. international
.
In addition, if promoted
effectively, it will also
contribute to bringing
culture
to the world so that every country
knows about it.In conclusion, I think the government needs to be cautious when deciding to
promote
its traditional
cultural heritage, and must be selective to bring
more benefits than disadvantages to the country
. Bringing
culture
to the world will help the country
develop and bring
a beautiful image to the country
.