IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but has numerous grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied, and the ideas need better development and support with examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 43 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 15 | |
| Lexical resource | 19 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:289
Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
govermetal
sections allocate huge funds for developing and improving the cultural issues regarding existing resources which hold different parts like televition
shows, museums, and festivals.Missing Linking Devices
difinetely
have many possitive
and negative sides like good cultural issues and sepending
a big source that directly affuluence
on society and their lives.On the one hand, performing these types of ceremonies and festivals could bring some
atractive
and benefitial
subjects. Countries
, who are interested in protect
of people
background, start to establish some different exibitions
and programs to disply
traditional aspects of living that were before and keep them alive. For example, Programs provided by museums showcase many new and may be uncovered aspects of folk ancients which most of them are unfamiliar for
everyone. So, it could be cause
individuals know better about the rich background and
it gives them a sense of pride.On the other hand, others are not
agree
with above
thoughts and
they concentrate on this manner that executing these plans just are completely waste of money. They strongly belive
that holders spend wealth of the country
on wrong ways. This population mentions that very significant effects remain with doing subjects. One of the main reasons is money, they say, and they try to prevent of forming these events. For instance, disagreed person demonstrate lists of expenses regarding this
events and belive
that country
mans
could pay these grants to another
parts of nation
such as sustainable envoronment
fragmet
and youth ministration.To conclusion, it is clear that pay attention
countries
to cultural events and relatives get result distict
outcome. Also, populations absorb to these mindsets that first
one brings many advantages and others brings disadvantages.