IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
6.0
Overall Score
24 Jul 24, 18:05
Want to practice?
Try this question
Overall Feedback
The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in discussing disadvantages and needs better development of ideas. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could be more varied and accurate.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 14 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:182
Paragraphs:4
Word Count Requirement
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
countries
have been providing a large amount of state budgets to advertise their national
identity in various forms. In my view, devoting considerable resources to maintaining culture brings both benefits and drawbacks to the nation, and I will present it in this essay.On the one hand, the government invests large budgets in mass media and regularly organizes large-scale exhibitions to share
national
traditions and culture with global audiences, and this brings a lot of benefits to their country
. For example, successful promotion has stimulated tourism demand, increasing economic development and creating employment opportunities for local people. Furthermore, this phenomenon not only creates international awareness about that
country
but also enhances
the national
pride of their people when their country
's reputation is recognized in the international forum.On the other hand, disadvantages are also created when a
country
focuses too much on cultural promotion.All in all, although maintaining
national
culture plays a vital role, there needs to be a balance in the amount of resources the government will use, ensuring equitable economic and social development.