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The essay provides a clear opinion and relevant examples, but it suffers from grammatical errors and lacks a strong logical flow. Improved coherence and a more varied vocabulary would enhance the overall quality.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 49 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 19 | |
| Lexical resource | 22 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Globalisation
#Agree / Disagree
Globalisation contributes to improved health outcomes globally through the sharing of medical advancements and public health strategies. Conversely, increased travel and trade also facilitate the spread of infectious diseases across borders.
Do you agree or disagree that globalisation has a more positive impact on global health than negative?
Submitted Answer
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English:
Global Issues:
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with
sharing medical strides and health strategies. In contrary, travelling
led to also
spreading
infectious across countries
. This essay agrees that globalisation has more benefits on global health, because
collective colaboration
between nations is crucial in fighting against viruses
and infections. However, it is also important to state that travelling has some drawbacks
such as spreading
diseases
.There is no doubt that globalisation and
colective
work among countries
is esential
in fighting against diseases
. Global associations such as WHO take an important role in a health care, because
they help us collectively. A clear example of this was the Corona Virus
in 2020 when the virus
was spreading
around the whole world, it was them that
put the best medics among
the world to create a vaccination.However, the downside of globalisation is an increasing number of
travelers
. In the past, when not a lot of people were able to travel
, diseases
were spreding
only in countries
or continents where they were occuring
. Nowadays, with many options for traveling
people can spread
viruses
that were known in there
country
among other nations, whose immunite
system
is
not resistent
against those viruses
. Moreover, an immunite
system varies in every continent and extensive traveling
is causing problems among countries
. For instance, Europe has started vaccinated the babies against tuberculosis in 1970, which led to
total
cut back of
this
diseases
,
unfortunately
with
increasing number of
travelers
from
countries
where vaccination was not mandatory is now Europe facing the issue of growing tuberculosis cases.
To conclude, globalisation is beneficial for
an
health improvement. On the other hand
globalisation and travelling
leads to spreding
deases
which is
dangerous for people with weaker immunite
system.