IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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Question
Deforestation contributes significantly to climate change by reducing the number of trees that can absorb CO2.
Explain how deforestation contributes to climate change and propose solutions to curb deforestation.
#Climate Change
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:199
Paragraphs:4
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Now a days,
extream
popluation
leds
to deforestation which
cause
significant damage
in
the
enviornment
.
This affect
both weather and habitat of the earth.I believe there are three major issues and
alos
some practical steps we can take to eliminate
this
,
Perhap the largest
probem
is the issue of population,Which
creating
need
of
housing and industries. People are trying to make houses and this
creating
deforestation and climate change.
for
example
excessive housing needs may
leads
to chances to high construction works. This will reduce the trees and producing large
amout
of cO2 in the atmosphere. Another major
concerns
linked with this is industrialization.
most
of the industries
ommiting
CO2.
LAck
of trees to convert CO2 to Oxygen would
create
massive impact
in
humans
mental health and
psysical
health as well.
Turning
in
to possible solutions,The biggest step would be
creating
awareness
amoung
people about the negative
concequences
associated with this trend.
Goverment
can also regulate this issue by law. Media
nad
schools can also
piut
efforts to educate students regarding the importance of trees and climate balancing.
To sum up , The key problems of deforestation can be
adressed
through awareness creation,
legislatin
and better practices.