IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay provides a balanced view on the importance of both family and friends, but it contains several grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Improved sentence structure and better use of cohesive devices would enhance readability and overall quality.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 46 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
| Lexical resource | 21 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 9 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
#Family
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:367
Paragraphs:4
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Cohesion
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Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
Nobody can neglect the importance of friendship in a one's
life
, but the question here are
friends
essential to
aquire
a happy
life
or is the
presence
of a good
family
enough?Personally,
I belive
that no balanced
life
can be obtained without the
presence
of both factors.In this
essay
I will further justify my
opinion
supporting it with multiple arguments.
I would like to start by
looking
into the place where everything starts,school, On average
a kid spends about 35 hours weekly in school. As a
concequence
, a large period of that time is allocated
into
hanging out with
other
kids and getting to know them, Thus the impact of kids on each
other
form
a huge part of their personality and
at
the
end
family
can't
accompany their
child
24/7.
Moreover,growing in
different
famalies
and from
different
backgrounds,
friends
have
different
points of view so they can help in widening the horizons of each
other
,
andby
telling each
other
their problems they will have the ability to
look
into it through multiple aspects
different
from the ones they are raised on.
On the
other
hand,the
presence
of a good
family
in your
life
with their
never ending
love,support and care
can't
be compensated by any
other
thing.This is because, unlike
friends
, your
family
would never give up on you and will always be found by your side.
Nevertheless,without the proper love and care provided by family
,the person would start to look
for it elsewhere
leading to a lot of unpleasent
experiences and heartbreaks. Furthermore,the impact that the family
leaves on each of its members forms the largest part of their personallity
. To clairfy
, the morals and ideas that your parents plant withen
you while growing up are those which will stay with you till
the end of your life
.Having
looked
at both sides,it has become clear that the person
can't
maintain a happy balanced
life
without the
presence
of both
family
and
friends
in it,That huge love given by your
family
along with the support and relatability you find in
friends
is the start of any good
life
.