IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in some areas. Grammar and vocabulary usage are inconsistent, and coherence and cohesion need improvement for better readability.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 36 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Over the years, public interest in national sports has seen a significant decline.
Why is public interest in national sports declining, and what can be done to rejuvenate this interest?
#Sport
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
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Words:277
Paragraphs:7
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Thesis Statement
National
sports are an important aspect of a country's colture
. Over the years
public interest
in national
sports has declined
.Missing Linking Devices
needs
to be considered to address the topic.Globalization is one of the factors that needs to be
adressed
when it comes to the declining
interest
in national
sports. In a more globalized world athletes
usually compete on an international level
consequently decreasing the interest
for national
competition.Globalization also implies that many sports that in the past were traditionally played in fewer countries can now be broadcasted worldwide sparking
intrest
in different nations and causing decreased interest
in national
sports.Missing Linking Devices
rejuvinate
public interest
in national
sports we should focus on children and young athletes
. By increasing the number of children that
participate in national
sports
we would ensure that there is and there will be an audience for those sports. Another solution to the aformentioned
problem, could be to organize and broadcast big sport events on a national
level
.People tend to be more engaged with a sport when there are
national
athletes
that
are able to compete and win globally. By investing in education and ensuring that there are good training facilities on a national
level
we could increase the chances of having more copetitive
athletes
resulting in higher interest
in the sport.When it comes to the
declining
interest
in national
sports
we should also consider that, compared to the past, people nowdays
tend to have more sources of entertainment. We often have access to hundreds of films, documentaries and TV programs all day every day
resulting in an alternative form of entertainment.