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Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
countries
in the world
like to show their cultures
to the rest of the world
. Goverments
launch lots of campaigns through festivals
, museums and television programs to promote
the national culture
. There are pros and cons associate
with this, which will be discussed in details in this essay.Firstly, having a rich
culture
to a country
is naturally giving neumorus
benefits to the economy of the country
. Specially , lots of tourists like to explore the different cultures
around the world
. With the current strong social media network
, goverments
can easily promote
their festivals
and other television programs as a documentries
around the world
to attract tourisum
. So, boot tourisum
directly strength the economy of the country
. As a
example, Songkran
festival
in Thailand is very
popular festival
not only in Thailand, but around the world
. During the month of April, thousands of tourists coming
to Thailand to enjoy the water games which is
part of Songkran. Additionally, our mordern
younger generation is not much care about their own cultural values. If government
could promote
these cultural values, that will be beneficial to the new and coming generations to know their roots.There are
numorous
commercial advantages of promoting
culture
, however , we cannot neglate
those disadvantages. One of the main impact
is cultural damages
. As example, promoting
national heritage sites get lots of people visiting those sites damage
those valueble
monuments. Because some times
, if forigners
visit their, but they do not value the as locals.In conclusion, I believe
promoting
culture
is good. But there should be sttick
regulations impose to protect the values of the cultures