IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting readability and coherence. More structured development of ideas and better cohesion are needed.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 40 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 15 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Migration leads to significant cultural exchanges and adaptations, affecting both the migrants and the host societies.
Discuss the process of cultural adaptation for migrants and the impact this has on the host country's culture.
#Culture
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:229
Paragraphs:4
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Coherence
Cohesion
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Thesis Statement
Migration
allows people
of different cultures to come together and live as a single part of society
. Migration
can help
in situations of wars and domestic crisis. While migration
can be seen as
a brighter path for migrants
in helping
them build a new life
however,
it can still have serious impacts
on both migrants
and the host
societies
.Taking
an example of Afghanistan's people
who migrated to Pakistan, it became difficult for them to settle
into a community of Urdu speaking
people
having a different cultural norms
. Migrants
can face a number of challenges
of speech, ethics, life
style
and work place environment challenges
. It is depends
on host
societies
how they welcome the migrants
since they also face the challenges
of sharing their resources and trust.Missing Linking Devices
Host
societies
should not be hostile and encourage migrants
in settling
in with ease. They should help
them in stabilizing. Sometimes
the impacts
on host
societies
could be dangerous
like in some countries
migration
lead
to food shortages and other life
survival resources.Impact
of migration
on both the migrants
and the host
societies
can be devastating if not taken
took
in effectively. Migrants
should consider settling
into the communities, learning the local language to communicate in a better way, try
to gain trust of loacl
hosts
for betterment of both
while host
societies
should welcome migrants
with open hands.