IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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The essay addresses the topic but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting readability and coherence. More structured development of ideas and better cohesion are needed.

Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors40
Grammatical range and accuracy15
Lexical resource16
Coherence & cohesion4
Task response5
Question
Migration leads to significant cultural exchanges and adaptations, affecting both the migrants and the host societies.
Discuss the process of cultural adaptation for migrants and the impact this has on the host country's culture.
#Culture
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:229
Paragraphs:4
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Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Usage
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Thesis Statement
Migration
allows
people
of different cultures to come together and live as a single part of
society
.
Migration
can
help
in situations of wars and domestic crisis. While
migration
can be
seen as
a brighter path for
migrants
in
helping
them build a new
life
however,
it can still have serious
impacts
on both
migrants
and the
host
societies
.
Taking
an example of Afghanistan's
people
who migrated to Pakistan, it became difficult for them to
settle
into a community of
Urdu speaking
people
having
a different cultural norms
.
Migrants
can face a number of
challenges
of speech, ethics,
life
style
and work place environment
challenges
. It
is depends
on
host
societies
how they welcome the
migrants
since they also face the
challenges
of sharing their resources and trust.
Missing Linking Devices
Host
societies
should not be hostile and encourage
migrants
in
settling
in with ease. They should
help
them in stabilizing.
Sometimes
the
impacts
on
host
societies
could be
dangerous
like in some
countries
migration
lead
to food shortages and other
life
survival resources.
Impact
of
migration
on both the
migrants
and the
host
societies
can be devastating if not
taken
took
in effectively.
Migrants
should consider
settling
into the communities, learning the local language to communicate in a better way,
try
to gain trust of
loacl
hosts
for betterment of
both
while
host
societies
should welcome
migrants
with open hands.