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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the challenges faced by disabled athletes and suggests measures to support them, but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Improvements in grammar accuracy, coherence, and vocabulary usage are needed to enhance the overall quality of the essay.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 45 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 17 | |
| Lexical resource | 18 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Sport
#Problem / Solution
Disabled athletes often face significant challenges that can limit their ability to compete at high levels.
What challenges do disabled athletes face, and what measures can be taken to support them more effectively?
Submitted Answer
Words319|Paragraphs4
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Thesis Statement
Many
sport enthusiast who are disabled
face numerous challenges throughout their life which can limit their talent to compete
at high standards. Many
disabled
people are more talented than normal persons
but due to their physical fitness they are not allowed, especially in physical sports such
as
cricket, football, tennis, basketball etc. This essay will briefly explain and help to provide solutions.Firstly, in outdoor sports
such
as
cricket, football, golf, running, wrestling etc.
Disabled
persons
are limit to
compete
with normal
persons
and
i
believe that this is okay because they
can't
compete
physically with them, But
many
sports federations
such
as
Olympic games and others have organised
many
sports competitions for
disabled
persons
for example Swimming, football, tennis and
many
more.
They are doing fantastic jobs for them and i
think that every country
in the world should start tournaments for disabled
persons
, It makes them more happy and
they don't
feel sidelined from
others.Furthermore,
many
sport athletes who were normal and
competing
in
highest
levels for their
countries
but due to some serious injuries they become physically
disabled
, these athletes can go to depression and feels like they are lonely all of their
team mates
are still playing
but
they are not good enough to play sports
anymore
.
So, organizing sports events will be beneficial for them and
they can compete
in many
sports according to their health. Not only outdoor activities
but indoor activities plays
a vital role in disabled
person
life, such
as
dart, crossbow , table tennis competitions are crucial for their physical as well as for mental health.In conclusion,
i
believe that all countries
should organise many
sports events for disabled
persons
and provide them facilities
to compete
in
highest
levels. This can be a significant change for them in their life and many
talented athletes can win this tournament and qualify to olympics
to represent their respective countries
.