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The essay effectively discusses both positive and negative impacts of cultural exchange, with a clear structure and relevant examples. However, there are some grammatical inaccuracies and occasional awkward phrasing that affect clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 18 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
Cultural exchange is often promoted as a means to foster international understanding and peace, but it can also lead to cultural homogenization or conflicts.
Discuss the positive impacts and potential drawbacks of cultural exchange.
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Many
people
argue that cultural
exchange
is a means to promote international co-operation, while preventing war. Nonetheless
cultural
homogenization or even conflicts may arise with cultural
encounters. In this essay, I deal with both views, highlighting the positive and negative impacts of cultural
exchange
.A sense of mistrust has always been very common between different populations. Ancient Greeks used to name barbarian all the
people
who were not able to speak their languages. Accordingly, natives of the Middle East were not only regarded as inferiors, but also as enemy. Nonetheless
, Herodotus, a Greek anthropologist, taught his fellow citizens that for every culture their habits and customs are the most rational ones. Cultures is
not maths and objectivity is strictly precluded, so that people
can only aim at reciprocal understanding.Moreover, innovation can be a consequence of a rise of
exchanges
. For centuries, scholars have successfully tried to overcome barriers in order to create some transnational way of co-operation. One of the main example is Erasmus from Rotterdam who was able to collaborate with the greatest minds of his century. The result of exchange
was then a spread of knowledge and the reduction of bigotry and ignorance in the European world.Potential drawbacks are
nonetheless
very relevant. Instead of creating more sensitive and reflective people
, cultural
exchange
, especially through universities, leads to a sort of hybrid-person, unable to be part of community of origin. Trans-national
elites, working for multinational conglomerates, generate social conflict with the lower classes. The distinguished Indian anthropologist Appadurai accused this elite of working against the vast majority of the citizenships, fostering the conflict between classes in every nations
.In conclusion, on first hand
cultural
exchange
has always been the dream of European humanists to prevent war and boost co-operation for human progress. Nonetheless
, especially in the modern world, transnational exchanges
have created people
not anymore
interested in the development of their communities. The consequence is a natural mistrust of the many toward some elites, even though the vast majority of Europeans still argue in favour of occasions of mutual encounters to promote peace and social development.