IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 7
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 7 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 7
7.0
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The essay effectively addresses the task with a clear opinion and relevant examples, but could improve coherence with smoother transitions. Grammar is generally accurate, though some errors and limited range are present. Vocabulary is appropriate but lacks variety.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 16 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults. Thus, it is better to learn languages in childhood.
Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
#Education
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Learning
a foreign language
can occur in adulthood or picked up as a child
. Whether it is more
efficiently learned
in childhood compared to as an adult
is where the debate is. I personally believe that languages
are more
easily learned
in childhood than as an adult
.This belief stems from the fact that firstly, at a young age,
children
's brains are constantly developing and absorbing stimuli from the environment at a rapid rate. When learning
something new
, for example a new
word or the pronunciation of a word, the mind is quicker to memorise, internalise and put it into practice. Secondly, from my exprience
, children
find it easier to integrate into a society that speaks a different language
from their original spoken language
. Children
tend to be more
open in accepting new
cultures and habits and will therefore have an easier time interacting with native speakers, hence, practicing
a key component to picking up a foreign language
.Conversely,
adults
would have a harder time learning
a foreign language
as they would have been comfortable conversing, thinking, listening and writing in their native language
. This would pose as an obstacle as adults
would then be taking time to translate words and phrases from their dominant language
before being able to string sentences in a new
one. Whereas for a child
, the sentence might come naturally as they learned
a new
language
alongside learning
their native language
. It is akin to comparing an adult
's mind as a slate that has been written on and has to be rewritten whereas a child
's slate is clean and empty.In conclusion,
children
readily accept new
concepts, are more
able to freely interact with others and their minds develop quickly. Thus, consolidation of a new
language
is easily done at a younger age. I do feel though that endeavouring to learn
a new
language
is a noble pursuit for children
and adults
alike.