IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the causes of employee dissatisfaction but lacks depth and completeness. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, and the essay lacks clear structure and development of ideas.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 29 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 11 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
In recent years, there has been a noticeable increase in employee dissatisfaction due to various factors such as poor work-life balance, inadequate compensation, and lack of career growth opportunities.
Discuss the causes of increasing employee dissatisfaction and suggest some solutions to enhance job satisfaction.
#Business & Money
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:168
Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
employee
dissatisfaction, some of the various factors are poor work
life
balance, inadequate compensation and lack of career growth opportunities.Missing Linking Devices
above mentioned
factors in detail.Firstly,
work
life
balance is a significant factor that has caused employee
dissatisfaction. It can be very difficult for employees
to create a healthy balance between personal life
and work
life
, this can cause stress, fatigue or lose concentration at work
or home. In addition
personal life
with loved ones can be affected , if there is no enough time to spend together or connecting.In addition, inadequate compensation of pay can demotivate
employees
to perfom
better. if
there are no incentives to show appreciation
it can be difficult for staff to give their best at work
. This affects productivity
of the organisation and results in loss. When there is inadequate compensation
there is increase
in staff turnover
which can be damaging to the organisation.Missing Linking Devices