IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but has numerous grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary is adequate but could be more varied, and the ideas need better development and support with examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 59 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 36 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
on
national
society regarding their culture
makes the government have to think how
to get public attention to their own culture
. One way to do is by promote
national
culture identitity
by expend
charge on festivals
, museums
, and television programs
. This essay will examine the advantage
and disadvantage
of this
cases.Recently, society is more interested
to
something fun. Therefore, event
such as festivals
, museum
tour
and fun television programs
would attract their attention. Research by students on
Indonesia University said people human determine interest in something from their sight, that is why museums
tour, festival
and program
televesion
is
a good
option to build awareness to
national
culture
. Moreover, these threen
option
are enchant activities, making it easier for the government to catch society
attention.In the other hand, there is also
disadvantage
about this case. High costs and complicated maintenance is
two of the main disadvantage
. For instance, if the government expend
money to
festivals
and television programs
and
it's
not give
a
equal feedback as the cost before, that will be a problem for state finances. In addition
museums
and festivals
requires
construction and maintenance that is difficult. Festivals
need to train several community
to be displayed at the event, while museums
need someone who is careful careful
in caring out historical objects.
Thus,
this case have
both advantage
and disadvantage
. Despite of
the costs problem and hard tendance
, I think this is a
effective way to promote national
culture
.