IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in discussing issues and solutions. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but contain errors. Coherence and cohesion are present but could be improved with better organization and transitions.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 27 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 11 | |
| Lexical resource | 6 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Inadequate investment in infrastructure like roads, bridges, and public transport can hinder economic growth and quality of life.
Discuss the issues caused by insufficient government investment in infrastructure and propose solutions to enhance this funding.
#Government Spending
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
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Words:308
Paragraphs:3
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Thesis Statement
country
's development start
with its infrastructure. Good infrastructures would significantly improve people's life, for examples our way of living, the ease of doing things, safety reasons, which leads to enhancing economic growth to a country
.From a long time ago there
has
been so many developing countries
that lacks
of facilities, especially in Asia such as Indonesia and India. In this case, let's
talk about Indonesia; the country
that I live in. Indonesia is most famous
for its diverse cultures, delicious cuisines, and beautiful natural beauty. Its
also famous for its geographical location, with nearly 17.000 islands in total. However, the infrastructures have not been fully covered in all of the cities
. From my perspective, Indonesia is Java-centric, which means Java island is being the center of every industry. The center of commerce, business, education, entertainment, and other things, leaving many islands outside Java struggle to only have decent roads. As a result, the social gap between these cities
is inevitable
which leads to no economic growth.In my opinion, the government should work hand in hand to combat this rising issue. Us, citizens have diligently paid high amount of taxes in order to get good life insurance, enough pension, and better amenities in the
city
we live. Might as well do the best for our money, instead of using it for higher level purpose
only. All of the government's staffs
should be responsible to
taking care of roads, fix
any broken public transportation, make development fully covering all of the cities
in Indonesia. I guess it is also nice if the government could decrease people's ability to buy car more than 2 at least for 1 family, so they will use public transportations more often and traffic could eventually
reduced
in the near future.