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The essay addresses the question but contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Coherence and cohesion are moderate, but the essay could benefit from clearer structure and more precise vocabulary usage.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
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| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 54 | |
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| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment.
Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience.
#Entertainment
#Direct Question
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Thesis Statement
contries
, consider purchasing
goods as a matter of satisfaction
similler
to daily requirments
. However, in my
openion
, while
I belive
, that it is a
waist
of hardly earned money and leading to
loose
the
sence
of buying
behaviour
, I agree that
shopping
for hobby has increased the consumer
satisfaction
by helping them to relive the stress levels and to overcome the busy lifestyle.
Moreover, this habit has contributed to gain a possitive
impact
towards economy, by accalerating
the demand for products and services. Also
created job oppertunities
in the market.However, due to globalization and change of lifestyle, has made
people
busy and stressful. To overcome the situation, people
choose purchasing
as a major factor. For an instant, there are many alternatives in the market depending on their ability to pay. Further, online shopping platforms with doorstep delivery , has boost
the buying
behaviours
. Owing that
, they tend to choose purchasing
over the other entertainment facilities.Consequently, the habit of
buying
has accalerate
the demand for products and services, which has possitively
affected on economy and increased the job opportunities. This is also
another favorable
impact
of shopping
for satisfaction
. Additionally, consumer buying
behaviour
depends on their action and the desion
on purchasing which can influenced by, income, profession, and marketing efforts.Missing Linking Devices
buying
behaviour
has effected four times higher in developed contries
than developing countrries
.Moreover, there are negative
impacts
also
in shopping
for satisfaction
. Waist
of hardly earned money is one of them. When people
satisfy themselve
with products and services, they tend to loose
their controll
of buying behaviour
. Which, leads to purchase
, both necessary and the unnecessary things. Mainly they forcus
on the quality than the quntity
or the price. Which is a clear indication for
waisting
of hardly earned money.To conclude,
dispite
of negative impacts
of shopping
for as an entertainment factor, I agree that it has more possitive
impacts
on people
by reliving stress and increas
the satisfaction
levels. Also
that has accalerate
the economy.