IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 7

IELTS Essay Sample Band 7

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Question
Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults. Thus, it is better to learn languages in childhood.
Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
#Education
#Agree / Disagree
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English:UK English
Words:325
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
It is claimed that youths have a higher success with
learning
a new
language
compared to adults. Thus, parents usually encourage their kids to
learn
new
languages
as they see it
beneift
their future. Let us look into why people believe it as such.
Biologically, children have developing
brains
which makes
learning
significantly more important than for adults who have completed the growth of their cranium. That is why it is believed that by
learning
a foreign
language
in the early stage of their growth, it may retain in their livelihoods for much longer. For instance, I
have been
brought to The Philippines from a young age as my parents intended to
learn
British English . As I continued my life in this foreign country, I quickly
learnt
the spoken
language
and excelled in it too. The fact that I
learnt
this skill during my childhood made it easier for me in the present time and promoted me to pursue advanced literature in English.
However, apart from my parents, the education system also agrees with this claim. In most educational establishments, they never fail to miss out at least one
language
-based subject - May it be Spanish, English or possibly Mandarin. This entails that even educators believe that teaching kids these subjects only benefits them in their development.
Afterall
, being able to speak more
languages
allows for
wider
network of people and communities. For those schools in the minority, students would grow up to live with regret and shame for not having
learnt
these skills; especially those who are monolingual. They tend to struggle to achieve fluency later on as they lack familiarity of the basics.
Although other external factors may contribute to the success of
learning
foreign
languages
, it is not without a doubt that youngsters may have it easier than for the
grown ups
. Therefore, it is a common practise to let children
learn
them starting at a young age and even until adulthood.