IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Coherence and cohesion are moderate, with some ideas not fully developed or logically connected. Lexical resource is adequate but could be more varied and precise.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 43 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 16 | |
| Lexical resource | 19 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Involving citizens in the planning of public transport systems can enhance the responsiveness and effectiveness of services. However, excessive involvement might lead to delays in project implementation and compromises on expert-driven decisions.
Discuss both the role and possible downsides of citizen involvement in public transport planning.
#Public Transport
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:345
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
many
ensuring public
participation on
the communal
transport
's plan
can increase the responsiveness and effectiveness of services
. On the other hand, some people
argue that excessive intervene might cause delays
in the project
realization and reducing
the expert
-driven decisions. This essay agrees that unnecessary public
involvement could is
contra-productive to public
transport
systems
.Plan
of communal
transportations
systems
which include citizens as the contributors of the idea
is believed as the best method to enhance the quality of the services
. By employing people
, the provider will know what people
's need and what they want. Therefore, a public
transportation
system
with the excellent services
and high responses is possible to be created. Although there is nothing sounds illogical about this notion, in the reality it can not
be implemented properly. The nature of human
that always never be enough make
the public
transport
providers faced
some hardships. The perpetual problem of
public
transport
in
Purwokerto
city is the prime example of it, when local
goverment
invited
people
to a gathering to hear their opinion on the future
communal
transportations
,
public
always tend to ask something that impossible to be
accomodated
such as 24/7
services
.
In contrast to the first statement optimistic's view, there is another opinion which stated the negative outcomes of
public
inclusion. Delays
on the project
implementation and a tendency to ignore expert
's choice are major problems caused by it. With to
many ideas
from the people
, an
rapid and effective work to finish the project
is impossible to be happen
since the plan
could change all over the time. Moreover, the expertise of scientists on the field of transportation
most likely to be abandoned because the project
will dependet
on the public's desire, while most of the time
it does not follow the scientific principal
.In conclusion, while the
idea
of public
involvement on
the communal
transportation
system
plan
seems reasonable, the unnecessary intervention by people
could lead into
project
's delay
and abandonment of scientific principle given by the experts
.