IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks depth in discussing the impacts of globalization and protection measures. Grammar and vocabulary errors, along with limited coherence and cohesion, hinder clarity and effectiveness.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 34 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5 | |
| Lexical resource | 19 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Globalization has significant impacts on local cultures, sometimes diluting or even replacing local customs and traditions.
Discuss the impact of globalization on local cultures and how these cultures can be protected.
#Culture
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:251
Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
cultures
significantly by diluting or even changeing
customs and traditions.Missing Linking Devices
infulence
of Globalization on cultures
and the way to conserve them.Due to the wide use of
internet
cultures
started to integrate gradually. In this digital age, everything has became
easier than previous times, which led to that almost every body
stared using internet
wether
for work or recuritment
. Because
of social media applications and TV, people
began to watch new people
from different regions with differnet
cultures
and traditions, and because
of the repetitive expousare
, this caused a smooth integration between cultures
without awareness from poeple
. For instance, a recent study concluded that most of the people
who learned Japanese, were people
who watched anime and wanted to be similar to the characters they saw in the anime.In contrast, governments are trying to
proteced
their cultures
from being lost because
of Globlization. Governments are creating more sources of cultural
information to strengthen the existence of culture
amoug
the community, such as, musuems
, cultural
festivals and TV programmes
. In addition, govenments
are inserting more cultural
information that strengthen cultural
belonging to the country to the curriculums by demonstrating their heritage. A study illustrated that 60% of the community in Turkey knew their history by historical TV shows.In conclusion, Globalization is one of the implications of the
spreaded
usage of social media and TV, which can be encountered with by spearding
cultural
materials through internet
and education.