IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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Question
Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on the child’s education, while others argue it is not so.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages, and opine.
#Sport
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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impact to their children's learning. This essay will examine the benefits and drawbacks of sport contest and give my perspective.The predominant benefit of competing sports. Firstly,
sport
activities offer a good physical health and mental
health, where students
can do exercise to maintain their body, and mental
at the same time. Furthermore, they can find interestes
through sports. For example, in a majority of high schools have included sports' time as weekly activities for their students
. Thus
Students
can learn how to improve their physical health and keep their mental
stable. Additionally, they can make connection
with their new peers, and observing
their interests
like being athlete as an example.Despite these facts of competitive sports benefits. However, there are a few drawbacks as well. In some cases, children will get into unfortunately accident during they are playing in their schools. Thus, they have missed their
classes
so they cannot follow lessons properly and either affect to
grade. Other
cases, some students
are literally addicted to sports, and they lose their interests to continue
studying, which really impact
to
their future careers because of lacking of knoledge
.In conclusion, there are arguments
on
sports competition, which will give side effects on their kids' education. Nevertheless, I strongly believe child
will occur the positive impacts through playing sport
such as maintain
physical health and mental
health. However, there are several drawbacks
including losing interests on
studying and get
into injury.