IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6.5

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6.5

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The essay effectively addresses the task by discussing how tourism increases waste and suggesting solutions, but could benefit from more detailed examples and a clearer thesis statement. The grammar is mostly accurate with a good range of structures, while coherence and cohesion are maintained, though transitions between ideas could be smoother.

Overall score	6.5
Grammatical range and accuracy	6.0
Lexical resource	6.0
Coherence & cohesion	7.0
Task response	7.0

Writing Task

#Tourism

#Problem / Solution

Tourist activities can generate a large amount of waste, which may overwhelm local waste management systems in tourist-heavy areas.

How does tourism lead to increased waste production and what solutions can be implemented to manage and reduce this waste?

Submitted Answer

Words300|Paragraphs5

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Thesis Statement

Introduction

areas

where

tourism

is prevalent,

waste

-management is a common problem due to surges in

waste

production, potentially causing

waste

management systems to be overwhelmed. To mitigate the amount of

waste

tourism

hotspots, the

government

should implement the appropriate policies that are specifically aligned with this objective.

To understand how to reduce

waste

, it is important to know how

tourism

contributes to the problem. First, it is expected for it to be overcrowded in tourist spots

and

therefore, lined with stalls targeting those who visit. As a result, visitors fall victim to these tourist-traps and consequently, feel inclined to purchase unnecessary goods that contribute to additional

waste

. Second, many countries do not have the proper policies in place that discourage tourists and residents alike to avoid disposing their

trash

improperly. Therefore,

trash

quickly piles

causing air and water pollution in the

area

With these factors in mind, the

government

has the authority to regulate the amount of

waste

that is

produced

especially in

areas

where

tourism

is most active.

Government

units can

fine

those who are caught littering in order to reduce litter and

waste

generation overall. In Singapore, this has been a long-implemented policy

and

it has been effective in maintaining its clean streets and high air quality. However, it is important that this movement be incorporated with recyclable and compostable packaging for basic commodities such as bottled water and packaged food. In doing so,

waste

is mitigated further and burning non-recyclable materials is lessened.

In conclusion,

tourism

should not be an excuse to stop applying proper

waste

prevention and management systems. Instead, this should be a motivator for local

government

units all over the world to preserve their

areas

and welcome visitors into a place that is both clean and comfortable.

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Total Errors	22
Grammatical range and accuracy	6
Lexical resource	7
Coherence & cohesion	5
Task response	4