IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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Question
International aid is intended to support development in less economically developed countries, but its effectiveness is often debated.
How does international aid influence development in recipient countries? How effective is it in achieving its goals?
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Thesis Statement
International
aid
has been seen and given to third world
countries
for centuries. Their main source is sending
aid
and/or
funds to
countries
in need,
aid
can mean anything
providing
money,
food
, and other necessities, especially if there is a war going on
, however,
international
aid
does not just stop at war, inflation, poverty,
countries
that are prone to disaster and such affected
countries
,
aid
is
provided
towards.
In recent research, there has been a debate going about whether
international
aid
is a good influence or a bad one. Or how effective it can be. In my opinion, International
aid
can be extremely effective, looking at countries
such as Ukraine, Sri Lanka, and Palestine are suffering because of some political war that has affected the people
and children. This has led to a global outrage where interest rates have risen, food
prices have increased and in general, living has become expensive all over the world. In times like this, countries
like the US, the UK, India, China, etc, have put the funds, medication and food
to help these countries
from going into recession. People
have been losing jobs, which has made it extremely difficult to survive as it is, so aid
that is being provided
has benified
these countries
. Many people
have food
and shelter, they also have medical treatments provided
to
them at times like it.During 2020,
countries
were experiencing a deadly virus where medicines were not easily found in some parts of the world, this is where the
international
aid
came in help, each
country
stood up to help one another, for example, India had the most cases of
Covid
where
people
were dying in thousands every day because there
wasn't
enough medication and oxygen cylinders, America and other
countries
took a step forward to help India in
providing
these amenities.
In conclusion,
I'd
like to say that
international
aid
can be effective if used in its own good
moral
however if used for ones own advantage it can
led
to provoke major disregard and could end up in mass destruction.