IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors, and the coherence and cohesion need improvement for better readability.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 33 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7 | |
| Lexical resource | 18 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Poor air quality is a critical environmental issue that poses significant health risks.
What are the health concerns associated with poor air quality, and what actionable solutions can be implemented to improve air quality?
#Health
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:290
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
quality
of the air we breathe
everyday
is important. If the air we breathe
is poor
, it becomes a
environmental issue that brings significant concerns to our health. Unfortunately, many
people
today aren't
aware of this fact.To
start
, there are many
health risks to breathing
poor
quality
air. Because our noses cant
filtrate the air we breathe
, our body
will just intake any air that goes in, be it polluted or not. Additionally
by breathing
poor
air, our body
is open to many
diseases
especially to our lungs since we breathe
through them. Furthermore, the immune of our body
also weakens due to the amount of pollution thats
entering our body
.With all that said, how do we prevent this? To
do
that, the causes of it need to be looked at first. Poor
air quality
can emerge due to many
factors, however
the most common causes are carbon emmision
. In most everyday lives, people
will take their vehicles
everywhere, this in turn, causes carbon emissions and worsens the quality
of air. To combat this, people
should reduce
the usage of their vehicles
and
in turn, start
taking public transport, the emission can be significantly reduced
. Alternatively, if travelling a short distance, a bike can be used. As an added bonus, this can help combat the traffic in crowded cities.To conclude,
poor
air quality
is a massive problem that starts
by
over reliance on vehicles
. It should be avoided at all costs as it brings many
health concerns to the people
breathing
the air. People
should start
caring for this world more and make the world we live in a better place. This can be started
by just reducing
the usage of their private vehicles
.