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Writing Task

#Government Spending

#Problem / Solution

Public healthcare systems in many countries suffer from chronic underfunding, which affects service quality and accessibility.

What are the consequences of inadequate government funding in public healthcare, and what measures can be taken to improve this situation?

Submitted Answer

Words275|Paragraphs4

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Paragraph 1 Issues:

Thesis Statement

In various

countries

public

healthcare

systems

suffers due to

poor

funding

schemes which affects service quality and accessibility. The

poor

funding

schemes used by the

government

has affected the quality of facilities provided by

public

healthcare

centers

To commence with,

public

healthcare

centers

are developed to

help

poor

who cannot afford private

healthcare

system

Unfortuantely

, inadequate

funding

by the

government

has affected the quality of facilities provided to the

patients

hospitals

. In other words,

patients

are not given the attention, care and proper check because staff is not being paid on time.

Thereofore

hospital

staff is reluctant to

help

patients

and provide them

full time

care they need.

Another aspect is lack of

funding

in distribution of medicines in the

hospitals

. To explain this, there

not enough

medicines

needed to treat people. Moreover, rooms

availaibility

for

patients

is another issue.

Hospitals

are not

reneovated

and are in

poor

condition. There is not enough space to

accomodate

large number of

patients

which has made

lives

of people difficult.

However, some measures can be taken to improve the current

healthcare

system

. Firstly, the

government

must set a certain

amount

of fund that should be given to

public

healthcare

sector. The

amount

must be divided into different parts to

fullfill

needs

of everyone.

for

example, a certain

amount

must be used to renovate

hospitals

, and other parts should

be spend

on delivering medicines to

hospitals

and for salary of employees. The

government

must appoint members to have a check and balance of the

amount

being

spend

and results

acheived

. This will

help

public

healthcare

system

to regulate properly and

help

public

in the best way possible.

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Total Errors	41
Grammatical range and accuracy	13
Lexical resource	21
Coherence & cohesion	3
Task response	4