IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
6.0
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The essay addresses the question but has several grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. The vocabulary is adequate but could be more varied, and the ideas need better development and support with examples.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 36 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 15 | |
| Lexical resource | 13 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Nowadays, university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education.
Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.
#Education
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Submitted Answer
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Words:336
Paragraphs:4
Task Response
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Thesis Statement
bachelor
degree is considered to be the bare minimum requirement before entering the job market. Employees who only graduate from secondary school can only apply for low-income paying jobs. However, there are exceptions of
successful people
who pursue a career through entrpreneurship
and utilize their talents to make a living and gain their social status. While some say education
plays a major part in their success
, some argue that their effort, use of soft skills
and gifted abilities are their
main reason
of
their success
. I believe in modern
world, higher education
is not necessary to succeed in life, as it is more important to acquire knowledge and skills
from social experience.To begin with,
people
's insight about the future and their global perspective allows them to seek for opportunities. For startups, it is essential for businessman
to grasp opportunities and keep an eye on the global trend
, in order to understand the market demand and how their company provide
value to the market. Li Ka Shing, a Hong Kong billionaire businessman and investor, missed out on a formal univeristy
educatin
himself at his young age. Despite his disadvantage of lower education
level, as compared to his peers, his vision in investment and business helps
him achieve success
, as the richest man in Asia Hong Kong.Futhermore, university
education
do not guarantee the possession of life skills
. There are news reports showing that some university graduates do not possess basic self management
skills
, such as cooking, doing laundries
. Some even do not
how to tie their show laces. Nowadays, people
overly rely on their parents to manage everything for them, as a result of "
helicopter parents" phenonmenon
.Indeed, owning a
teritary
education
certificate will certainly assist
people
to receive better job offers than those who
don't
. However,it is on us whether we have the global perspective to seek every
chances
to grow and learn, gradually becoming the best version of ourselves and achieve
success
.