IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6.5

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6.5

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27 Mar 25, 12:52

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The essay effectively addresses the task, discussing challenges and solutions for maintaining cultural traditions, but could benefit from clearer organization and more varied vocabulary. Some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing slightly hinder readability, though the essay remains coherent and cohesive overall.

Overall score	6.5
Grammatical range and accuracy	6.0
Lexical resource	7.0
Coherence & cohesion	6.0
Task response	7.0

Writing Task

#Culture

#Problem / Solution

In the fast-paced modern world, maintaining cultural traditions can be challenging, especially among younger generations who may feel disconnected from their cultural roots.

What challenges are faced in maintaining cultural traditions and how can these traditions be kept alive among younger generations?

Submitted Answer

Words292|Paragraphs4

English:

Global Issues:

Task Response

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Coherence

Cohesion

Vocabulary Usage

Grammar Range

Ideas Development

Logical Flow

Paragraph 1 Issues:

Missing Linking Devices

Thesis Statement

In today's globalized society, many feel that they are losing touch with their cultural origins and are unable to continue their traditions. The main reason for this can be attributed to the growing interconnectedness of the

world

making it easier for external influences to penetrate cultural norms in different

communities

. That is why it is important to keep yourself educated on where you

came

from and consistently engage with the members of your

community

Influence from other

cultures

does have its

benefits

but imposing ideas on another

community

can be detrimental. An example of this is the term "

white-washing

" which refers to the growing influence of Western or European

culture

which is mostly seen among popular musicians in Asia. Doing so promotes the idea that Western

culture

more superior than

Asian

culture

because its value is measured by its popularity. Moreover, society has placed so much value in what sells that governments construct infrastructure on indigenous lands destroying the homes of many cultural groups.

Paragraph 3 Issues:

Missing Linking Devices

With all of these things considered, one must be astutely aware of who they are and where they

come

from to have a

deeper

understanding of why their

culture

is important. To know its importance means being able to uphold the values of your

culture

and in turn, consistently practicing its traditions. Doing so can further extend the richness of one's

culture

to the current generation and those to

come

In conclusion, globalization does not have to lead someone away from their roots if someone is truly willing to educate themselves on where they

come

from. Along with

community

engagement, the idea that other

cultures

are more superior can be eliminated and the sanctity of a

culture

can be kept alive for future generations.

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Total Errors	20
Grammatical range and accuracy	5
Lexical resource	6
Coherence & cohesion	5
Task response	4