IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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The essay provides a clear opinion but lacks detailed examples and evidence to support the argument. There are several grammatical errors and issues with coherence and cohesion, which affect readability and overall effectiveness.

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Lexical resource5.0
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Total Errors28
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Lexical resource10
Coherence & cohesion5
Task response5
Question
The debate on whether video games promote aggressive behavior in players has been ongoing. While some studies suggest a correlation, others see them as harmless entertainment.
Do you agree or disagree that playing video games leads to increased aggression among individuals?
#Entertainment
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:154
Paragraphs:3
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Thesis Statement
In this modern era, video
game
has
taken over the market and has a rumour that it promotes aggressive
behavior
in players. This has started a huge controversy among gamers and non-gamers. But in my
opinion
game
is just a source of
enterainment
and has nothing to do with promoting aggressive
behavior
.
The main purpose of video
game
is to provide a relaxing time to the user. It not only
entertain
the user but
help
them to think critically and build logic. The research has found that the one who
play
games
has faster response time than that of
other
.
Gamers nature differs
fom
the
game
they
play
. If someone
plays
strategy
board
game
then their nature will be calm and their thinking will be critical. If someone
plays
action
game
then their nature will be
talkactive
and their thinking will be logical and
their
their response will be faster than usual person.