IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
5.0
Overall Score
07 Aug 24, 11:55
Want to practice?
Try this question
Overall Feedback
The essay addresses the question and provides a clear opinion, but it contains numerous grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied and precise.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 44 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 16 | |
| Lexical resource | 20 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them.
In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?
#Entertainment
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:324
Paragraphs:4
Formality
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Thesis Statement
this days
, some people
consider video
games
as harmless fun, and even is benifical
for educational tool. Conversely, others think video
games
is harmful. In this eassy
, I will explore why I think the benefits of video
games
is
outweight
the drawbacks.In contemporary society, there are increasingly more
people
eager to play
video
games
, especially teenagers as well as young adults. playing
the video
games
excessively will lead to people
have
physical issue, for instance, eyesight decrease, backpain
problem. the
research in China shows more than 75% of teenagers and scholars who are under 16 years old are have
significant eyesight problems, the proportion of people
who are wearing glasses is more over 88%. Due to their long hours seating, video
games
players are suffer
backpain
easier than common individuals.Although there are kinds of negative issues on
playing
video
games
, the advantage of playing games
can not
be ignore
. There are numerous aspects.
Firstly, playing
video
games
could increase a relationship with friends. teenagers
or adults who are playing
the ssme
game
could be a fascinating topic after dinner or during leisure times, it is good
way to tie the band between close freinds
. The research in US
shows nowadays
, video
games
already became a popular chatting topic and also a famous campaign. Secondly, video
games
such as puzzles, drwan
and guess play
a crucial role in increasing mental health. children
play
those games
can make a quicker thinking on mathematical problems. In US research, scientists illustrate children could solving
calculus by using less time if they addict to those intelligent video
games
. Thidrly
, lots of 3A games
, could gain players a strong aethetics
jungement
. Not only for young people
, but also for elderly.Overall, I admit,
playing
video
games
has some bad impact for people
, but I still believe this is a great recreational approach for everyone, playing
video
games
also has some signifficant
postive
effects, especially on educational target.