IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in argumentation and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but contain errors and limited range. Coherence and cohesion are present but could be improved for better readability.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 32 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 17 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
There is a growing reliance on digital platforms for advertising, which might neglect audiences accessible through traditional means.
What are the issues associated with an over-reliance on digital advertising, and how can a more balanced advertising strategy be achieved?
#Media & Advertising
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:272
Paragraphs:5
Task Response
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Thesis Statement
compare
to other
traditional media. Easily accessed and effectively targeted
the audience has always the strength that sellers look after. However, it started to raise concern due to its limitation. There are some areas that are not provided with adequate internet
which are
the essential system to connect to the online platform. This weakness becomes the issue to
large population of audiences living in remote or developing places. This essay will shed a light on the issue of over-utilizing digital marketplace and how to combat this problem.First of all,
some of regions
do not have proper internet
connection which will hinder them from maximizing the internet
based
application
. This condition leads to a slow spread of information that effecting the whole region's knowledge on
updated news. On the other
hand, information on latest
product is really important
, because
with advanced technology
the quality of life can be improved. For example, people living in
a farm need an update information
about the latest farming machines that can help them ease their job.Second, it can also create the sense of inequality in the country. This condition can create the feeling of neglection from remote areas where
internet
is not facilitated.Missing Linking Devices
Government
shall foster advertiser
to broadcast their product through other
traditional means like TV, Radio or newspaper. The incentives can be by giving them tax free
ads or other
facilitates,In short, although
internet
based
media offer many advantages, it is important for people to consider other
means to create more
balanced spread of promotion.