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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks a clear thesis statement and logical flow, with some grammatical errors and limited vocabulary. Improved coherence and more examples could enhance task achievement and lexical resource.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 29 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 13 | |
| Lexical resource | 8 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Online education not only disseminates knowledge but also requires the use of digital tools, enhancing technological proficiency.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages related to the technological demands of online education.
#Online Education
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
day
by day
. From younger to older generation, everyone is surrounded with
internet and social
media
platforms. The usage of technology has its own pros and cons. From using gadgets in schools for online education to working from home in corporates, technology has made its way in our daily lives.Post
covid
, electronic devices has made a huge impact. Social
media
has taken a troll over other means of spreading information. Platforms like youtube
or twitter
had
made it easy for individuals to have easy access to information. People who work in corporate has
an option to either work from their homes or twice a week attend the offices. Due to which, people are now able to spend more time with family and friends.However, the high demand of technology has left a negative
impact
specially on high school kids. Parents, nowadays, give their children mobile phones with the aim that it will be useful in their studies. But it has taken a wrong way. Teenagers
rather than spending time on gaining knowledge
prefer spending time on social
media
platforms like instagram
and facebook
, and learn
inappropriate things. Study reveals, kids now have became
more self consious
about their body. They have started comparing their lives to what they see on social
media
.In general, technological demands are important is
day
to day
world, but also it is equally necessary to put a constraint of
its usage on the children between the age of 5-16.