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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in idea development and examples. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, with frequent errors affecting clarity and coherence. Cohesion is present but could be enhanced with better transitions.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 62 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 29 | |
| Lexical resource | 25 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives.
Do you agree that living in the computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.
#Technology
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
technology
has increased due to
use and impact of it in peoples
day to day life
. In my opinion
technology
have
more
advantang
that disadvantage
. Although, many of them use
technology
as their source to generate income where some people
get unemployed of technology
. In the following essay we will discuss it's
advantage
and disadvantage
.On the one hand,
technology
have made
our life
more convinent
. In the past, people
use
to
work hard and do difficult work
by risking their life
but now
due to
technology
machine
do it for us. Talking about simple example of home accessories it have
made
our workload less than it used
to be in past time
. It saves our time, make
our work
easier and effortless too. Therefore, it proves that using
technology
in our daily life
have
more
advantage
than it's
disadvantage
.In the other hand, many human jobs are now performed by
machines
which reduces job opportunity for human
and leads to unemployment. To earn more
profit us human
should bare
more
risk and gradually robots are made
to do such work
so in future we have that fear that technology
will take over humans. In the many part
of world
hi-tech machine
are invented to do work
such as agriculture, finance, healthcare etc. Almost half of labours are unemployed due to
use of machine
in those sector
.In conclusion, everything
have
it's
advantage
and advantage
. Similarly, technology
have it's
advantage
and disadvantage
. It's
disadvantage
may have a huge impact in
humans
but i
believe that people
use
it and create an opportunity for themself
using
technology
.