IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay has some grammatical accuracy but lacks coherence and cohesion. The task response is weak as it does not directly address the question, and the lexical resource is limited with some repetition and lack of variety.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 4.0 |
| Total Errors | 19 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
As automation and artificial intelligence become more prevalent, there is a concern that many jobs will be displaced, although some argue it will also create new types of jobs.
Do you agree or disagree that automation will lead to more job creation than job displacement?
#Work
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:289
Paragraphs:3
Paragraph Count Requirement
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Usage
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Thesis Statement
Sometimes
, it is argued that it could be good practice for companies
and other institutions that instead of working
on innovations
that just make profits
, they should work
on innovations
and ideas
that benefit the environment and social problems. While I understand the advantages of prioritizing ideas
to address people
's daily routine issues, I completely
disagree with this notion.On the one hand, environmentally friendly
innovation
could benefit individuals, especially future generations. For example, new ideas
about creating efficient cars and renewable energy have many advantages that could be helpful for our general health. Besides, people
could trust institutions that care about the environment and people
. When big companies
and conglomerates start to care about innovation
that addresses people
’s problems, it could encourage people
and students to spend their time on something similar. Despite all of these sentences, I am afraid I would argue against this idea
because I think all of these claims would be unrealistic in the modern world.On the other hand,
companies
need money to survive and serve their clients; without any profits
, they cannot even pay their employees. A good innovation
needs a proper group of skilled workers to work
on it; training workers, scientists, researchers, and managers cost a lot of money. Another reason worth mentioning here is the fact that companies
or people
who devote their time to an idea
should be motivated to try harder; without any profits
, no one tends to work
any further. Plus, when the company
’s income is low, professionals don’t
try to get a job at that company
because of the lack of market cap.