IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6
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6.0
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in analysis and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could be improved for better clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 26 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 6 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Media plays a pivotal role in shaping cultural norms and narratives, influencing how societies perceive themselves and others.
How does media influence cultural norms, and how can it control cultural narratives?
#Culture
#Direct Question
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Words:239
Paragraphs:5
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ways
of communicating, sharing information has
revolutionized significantly. One of the newly found ways
is media
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in
communities, and plays a pivotal role in shaping cultural norms and narratives, influencing how societies perceive themselves and others.One perfect example is, how social
media
platforms like
instagram
, TikTok and Twitter have critically influenced the younger generation specifically the millennials and Gen Z. Most older adults see life as it is portrayed on these websites in terms of acceptable beauty standards, career choices and even the political spectrum.
One example of acceptable beauty standards is what is known as the Kardashians figure, tiny waist, wide hips and big boobs. Most girls have fallen victims to body shaming
, leading them to feel the need to change their appearance to look like celebrities like Kim Kardashian.Missing Linking Devices
media
outlets. Some even go to the extent of staging assassination attempts to get media
attention to spread the news, so they can gain public sympathy. This goes to show how much reporters can shift or manipulate the society, and some people misuse it for their benefit.In conclusion, it is essential to acknowledge the impact
media
has on our society and our way
of thinking. However, it is crucial to recognise that religion and education also shapes
the way
people view their lives.