IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence in some parts. Grammar and vocabulary usage are adequate but could be improved for better readability and precision.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 32 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 13 | |
| Lexical resource | 6 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 9 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
The extent to which family should be involved in personal decision-making is often contested, particularly when it concerns individual freedom.
Do you agree or disagree that families should have a significant say in personal decisions of their adult members?
#Family
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:336
Paragraphs:12
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Thesis Statement
family
in individuals
lives have significantly changed. In modern families
relatives tend to have a less say in decision making
than in traditional families
.Most homes acknowledge the importance of
making
personal decisions detrimental to one's future, therefore
they try to avoid any regrets for their adult members in the long run.Missing Linking Devices
making
life choices for their children.One of the detrimental reasons is, when kids get to the age of freedom. There is an urge to try new things, some of them can be harmful if not managed properly. For
example
most boys and girls, when they turn eighteen years they want to move out of their family
home. Mostly because they want freedom, which is not a bad thing but
the scary part is what they will do with the liberty, especially without any restrictions or supervision.Missing Linking Devices
a various issues
like drug abuse, prostitution and cohabitation which is against the majority of community's norms and values.Missing Linking Devices
making
decisions.Missing Linking Devices
However, some people might argue that relatives should participate in personal judgments of their older kids.
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In addition, this is the time when
the
get to be adults themselves otherwise
they will never stop being their parents
kids , therefore
it is crucial they respect the boundary that separates them from childhood.Overall, I can contest that
is
relevant to have relatives help individuals making
choices but to a certain extent. A balance can be created as to what and when should family
be deciding.In conclusion, we all need perspectives of people who have experienced life situations
but
a line should be drawn.