IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and the essay should be more coherent and cohesive with better-developed ideas and examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 24 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Governments around the world may choose to invest heavily in sports for various reasons, including promoting national unity and improving public health.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of high governmental investment in sports?
#Sport
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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as a means to achieve
socIAL
benefits, primarily promoting
national unity and improving public health. While this strategy offers several advantages, it also presents certain drawbacks that needs
careful consideration.To begin with, sports have emerged as a powerful tool for
promoting
national unity. By promoting
teamwork, sports can connect multiple culturul
and social diversites
within a nation, fostering a sense of common identity and pride among the citizens. For instannce
, a huge sporting event like olympics
help
nations to showcase their unity among different athelets
and audience from different culture, languages spoken, tradition and their respective sports to the whole world. Promoting
sports from early age could be a smart and effective way of improving one's health. Sports helps us to become fit both physically and mentally. To be mentally and physically fit is everyone's neccesity
.