IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but has numerous grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied and precise.
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| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
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Question
Stricter environmental laws are essential for sustainable development, though they may negatively impact industries and economic growth.
Do you agree or disagree that governments should implement stricter environmental laws despite potential negative impacts on the economy?
#Environment
#Agree / Disagree
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coinsidered
one of the priorities of many countries. A debate has been brought up ever-since that whether rules implemented by governments on companies
are advisable or adversely affect the country's economics. What will be discussed in this essay
, is regarding the mentioned issues and my personal prespective
of why I believe despite of
number of downsides, stricter laws
must be applied upon industries.First and foremost, emissions of
toxic
chemical
in water and exhaustions of greenhouse gases are amongst
the obtacles
of production
proceedures
by companies
. Take a detergent
company
for instance, if
productions
has been
proceed
using old
chemical
models, and the final product is not
eco- friendly
;
everytime
a costumer use that product, they cause a
tangibile
amount of
toxic
to be released to sewages and therefore the connecting streams.
correspondingly
aquatic inhabitat
would be endanged
. Studies have show
that th eleading
cause, in increase in number of endangered animals in sea's and river's streams is the artificial toxic
chemical
.Having said that, the
disadvanges
are notable and can not
be ingnored
. On the one hand, companies
need to invest on dedicating a line for production
examination, in which they examine in order to observe whether their products are eco-friendly or not. On the other hand, by applying this factors, they may face an econimacal
downfall and reduction in the production
number which in some intense cases, cause bankruptcy.Inspite of all mentioned
obtacles
, we must remember if environment is not survived today, nor will be our childeren
tomorrow. Hence, in my personal prespective
despite of
all the downside effect caused by the settlement of these laws
, preventing furthure
pollution regarding our planet is more vital and must be priorotized
.In conclusion, If countries choose to proceed with applying
laws
on companies
, It would be beneficial in a long-term run as it would save our planet for future generation. In my personal prespective
, these laws
inhibit the more than current value of exhaustion of carbon dioxide in air and toxic
chemical
in water.