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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in idea development and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage need improvement, with frequent errors and limited range affecting clarity.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 48 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 24 | |
| Lexical resource | 15 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Government Spending
#Problem / Solution
Rural areas often suffer from inadequate government funding, which affects their development and integration with urban sectors.
What are the issues associated with insufficient government spending on rural development, and how can these funds be increased or better utilized?
Submitted Answer
Words274|Paragraphs4
English:
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Paragraph 1 Issues:
Thesis Statement
In recent
decade
, urban
area
is becoming larger and larger with the increasing amount of people who prefer to work in
building
rather than
a
farm, as a result, the
rural
area
is dropping in population and leads to a lack of fund.
I believe there are several ways goverment
can solve this problem.Firstly, the insufficient spending on
rural
area
will cause a descend
in the public facilities, like fire station, shopping centre
and hospital
. As a result, the shortage of these service facilities will lead to fall
on
job opportunities and a significant drop on
the current resident
's happiness. Whatsmore
, the agricultural resources produced in
rural
area
are the most important thing for all
citizen
, the lack of development
on
rural
area
will generate a demand
about
import agricultural
product
and result
a
trade deficit, which will bring
a
uncommon inflation.
What is needed, is to raise the expenditure on
contryside
development. goverment
should save the cost on overdevelopment area
and focus on the infrasturcture
on the conuntry
side, if the basic requirement
are
met, more people will be glad to move to the countryside. Secondly, A increase in import tax can help the goverment
to encourage domestic buyer
to support local products, on the other hand, goverment
can get the fund they need to make the influence.All in all, life is not a Utopia,
rural
area
are the basic of all country and should be developed in the first place since the product are the first need in the daily life. I believe goverment
can have more fund by increase
the taxation and spend
the expenditure on the infrasturcture
.