IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic with several errors, and the ideas are not well-developed or logically organized.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 50 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 27 | |
| Lexical resource | 15 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Many crimes are often related to the consumption of alcohol. Some people think that the best way to reduce the crime rate is to ban alcohol.
Do you think this is an effective measure against crime? What other solutions can you suggest?
#Criminal Justice
#Direct Question
Submitted Answer
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Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
society
, crimes
are increasing rapidily
day by day. One of the reason
is consumption
of alcohol
in excessive
way that directly and indirectly cause domestic violence
which lead
to crime
. So People think that alcohol
should be ban
in order to reduce
the crime
rate
.As we know, the person who are
drunk
had no sense at all and also
are completely out of mind. They even
don't
know what they going
to do after getting drunk
which might leads
to crimes
. We can hear in news that after having party or drinking alcohol
friend killed another friend. So, Alcohol should be ban
as it makes a person out of control. We also
heard a drunk
husband beating his wife at night
wich
sometimes lead
to killing own wife's life. It badly affect
the pyschology
and brain of small children at home. They also
learn to drink by observing their drunk
father or mother.It shows that
ban
on Alcohol can be very effective and can play vital
role to reduce
crime
rates
in society
. Alcohol
comsumption
is also
bad for health
so why to drink just for short term
relaxation and fun. It indirectly
also
destroying
the relationship with family members and friends. To decrease the crime
rate
, alcohol
consumption should be ban
from society
.Missing Linking Devices
reduce
the crime
rate
from
society
. Proper education should be provided to people about improving themselves and strict laws should be made who do crime
so before doing crime
they must feel afraid to do that. Awareness program
should be held time to time in rural areas. Government
should provide emplyment
opportunities to youth so they get busy on developing the nations. By following these it can help us to reduce
the crime
from
our society
.