IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks a clear thesis statement and logical flow. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting readability and coherence.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 46 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 19 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Diet plays a critical role in health, affecting everything from body weight to risk of chronic disease. The extent to which individuals should be held responsible for their dietary choices is often debated.
To what extent do you agree or disagree that individuals have a significant responsibility to maintain a healthy diet?
#Health
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:321
Paragraphs:3
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Thesis Statement
diet
first, diet
is way
for someone to lose their weight
. In such
cases, diet
often helps
people
to reduce
their daily calorie and sugar intake that they usually help
, it helps
to get in shape while also keeping them away from developing
diabetes or other
type of
diseases
. However, in some cases
people
goes
to extreme lengths when they are on a diet
, some refuse to eat
which make
them to develop
anorexia, eating disorders, etc.In
people
eyes
diet
is a healthy way to lose weight
as they are some advantages such
as
, reducing
obesity and other
health threatening disease
. Mostly,
people
use
diet
to
reduce
weight
but there were
other
advantages in doing so, firstly, in general knowledge it
helps
them to maintain their
weight
and body image while also
reducing
the chances of
developing
diseases
,
such
as
diabetes, heart
disease
, cancer and
other
types of
life threatening
diseases
.
Secondly, it improves mental health as it helps
them to boost their confidence and self esteem
while also helping
them to counter depression. Lastly, it helps
their internal and external organs to be healthy and work in perfect conditionsuch
as
,
the brain, a healthy brain has a better focus and memory.But
every advantages
would have
their
disadvantages, in some reports there were people
who develop
anorexia, mostly it happens to idol or celebrities as they need to keep their body image well to avoid any negative comments or unnecessary commotion. For example, in the kpop
industry
male and female kpop
idols must be in good shape to become an idol as their fandom are
the source of their income
so they need to look their best to not disappoint them. In other
case, an extreme diet
lead
someone to develop
depression and low self esteem
which later ended in their own demise.