IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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| Task response | 5.0 |
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Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:250
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
number
of countries
, governments expenditure on promoting national culture
significantly through festivals, museums, and public television programs.Missing Linking Devices
experience
I observe
that there are various advantages regarding the promotions of such culture
throughout the country
. In which the survey concludes that the historical value of such specific
country
is being highlited
through various progams
. The upcomming
generations
will get the idea of their past and present culture
through different communication medias
channels in which the growing generation
will find the ease to gain the knowledge of their culture
.On the other
hand
i
observe that some of the cultural practises
has
some disadvantages to it. like
some of the cultures
practises
some cult practises
which leads
to the various major problems
like child marriage, sacrifising
the innocent animal
, witchcraft, fake doctors who claims
to prevent any diseases with his
magical spells. In most of the developing countries
the bad practises
has
been passed down to generations
to generation
which is leading to mass cult practises
which has been a greater threat to the society. Most of the cultural belifs
seems
to be leading the generation
to good and bad practises
in which most of the people are seems
to be easily influenced by it.Hence, I concluded that promoting the national
culture
through festivals, museums, and public television programs has two sides of it which impact the generation
in both bad and good ways. In which the generation
can be highly influenced by their cultural belifs
and practises
.