IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks clarity and coherence, with several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The ideas are not fully developed, and the vocabulary is limited, affecting the overall task response and lexical resource scores.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 33 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 13 | |
| Lexical resource | 13 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Health
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Health education in schools can play a crucial role in forming healthy habits early. However, its implementation and curriculum content can sometimes be controversial.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of health education in schools.
Submitted Answer
Words279|Paragraphs4
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Thesis Statement
education
has always been a public interest. it
could be obviously witnessed a phenomenon that society required school
to build the healthy habits
for teenagers rather than their family . Despite recognizing the merits and drawback behind this phenomenon, I am confident to believe it has
more advantage.All
to
often, we have seen and continue to see news about high school
children fell in to drug problems, as a reason of parents were lack of time to safeguard their kids for whole day. School
health education
are more vital. Since as a child, the social circle they build are
based on the enviroment
of schools
, what schools
teach them can be repeat
and talk for weeks. The social enviroment
is like a dye vat, it can change things in them quickly, no matter the correctness.Many argue that the costs of letting
teacher
focuse
on the healthy habits
are too high, individuals have limited time and energy, the first priority thing in school
is studying rather than building the healthy habits
. Teacher
will get confused if they are too many duty
for them to carry out, which might leads
to lose
-lose situation.The formation of a positive
habit
can not
be done only by the parent. Education
institutions have advanced influence on this. We can't
afford to let our next generations have a
unhealthy condition, because
nothing in the world is more valuable than health. Therefore, althought
teacher
will have more pressure when they need to focus on both the health and knowledge of children, the positive effects of performing health education
at academy continue to outweight
the negative effects.