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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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The essay addresses the topic but lacks clarity and coherence, with numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Vocabulary is adequate but not varied, and the essay could benefit from more structured development of ideas and examples.
Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy4.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors45
Grammatical range and accuracy16
Lexical resource20
Coherence & cohesion5
Task response4

Writing Task

#Culture
#Direct Question
Cultural heritage encompasses traditions, sites, and artifacts that are valued for their historical, aesthetic, or cultural significance. Protecting these assets can be fraught with challenges.
What constitutes cultural heritage, and what are the challenges associated with its protection?

Submitted Answer

Words275|Paragraphs4
English:UK English
Global Issues:
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Thesis Statement
In modern epoch, the issue of culture protection has always been a matter of public interest.
it
could be obviously witnessed a phenomenon that
a
agreat
amout
of historical builds were replaced by modern skyscrapers and superstores to meet the rising needs
for
a growing population. Despite the advantages of protecting the cultural building, the challenges of reaching
this
goals are clear.
The definition of a cultural
heritage
can various from people's perspective, a procedure to make a wine known by
one children
can be
considerd
a
heritage
, while a popular song with
more
than a million clicks
can not
be
considerd
heritage
.
The key point of
heritage
is the deposition of
time
rather than the popularity. The value of
time
are
not easy
to create
no
matter how advanced we are.
Many argue that the modern technology can replace some old tradition in a more
effienciy
way, which can help us
saving
more
places and
times
.
however
,
hertiage
is
a
accompishment
we can continue to benefits from our ancestors. Furthermore, In some developing
countres
, the government
are
willing to replace the historical builds with a hi-tech business
centers
to fulfil the fiscal
commitements
when they were in election. Since, the financial benefits have
more
influence than some artifacts in a museum.
Although It is
hard
to find
a
equivalence point between the emotional value and economic value for the
hetitage
, I believe as
time
pass
,
more
and
more
people will realize how important these assets mean to us as other supplies become more and more abundant.
we
can not
afford to lose the physical materials, ideas, skills and understandings of our past.

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