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Question
In many countries, governments spend significant resources on promoting national culture through festivals, museums, and public television programs.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of governments promoting national culture?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
may
countries
, government
allocate resources to promote
national culture
through festivals, museums and publis
television program
. while
there are several advantage
to this approach, there are also several disadvantage
that need
to be reconsider
. National Culture is essential
aspect in
country
's identity. How people
in that country
preserve their culture
and their tradition shows how they respect their ancestors.Government
as a representative of the country
and its people
have
responsibility
to preserve this treasure. They introduce their tradition to other country
by
the most entertaining way that can attract people
attention
such
as
festivals, museums, and public
televisions
programs. And in order to do
that, government
need
to spend some public
budget.The advantage
by
promoting
the tradition is the
country
itself become
wellknown
. example
like Indonesia
government
actively promote
Batik as their Identity's traditional attire. Many people
representing Indonesia, wear Batik on the occasion. Promoting
nation
culture
can also attract tourist
and have benefit
in economic
sector.However, there are several things that
need
to be considered. The disadvantage is to promote
something worldwide, you have to do it repeatly
, and it spend
significant
amount of money. funding
cultural promotion can take away public
budget in essential sector
such
as
public
transport budget, healthcare, education, etc. This may lead to public
dissatissfaction
.In conclusion, while there are many
advantage
point in
promoting
national culture
such
as
increasing attraction for tourist
, there is
also disadvantage point that should be consider
such
as
neglecting public
services. Government
need
to balance their approach and analyse which approach that most beneficial for public
.