IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 7
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 7 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 7
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The essay addresses the question well, providing reasons and problems associated with rural to urban migration. However, there are some grammatical errors and the cohesion could be improved for better readability.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 17 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas.
Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?
#Society
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:275
Paragraphs:4
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rellocating
from villages and moving
towards cities
for various reasons. This essay examines the causes for this, and explores the issues associated with this trend.The most common reason why individuals choose to
move
from rural to urban
areas, is the hope that there are better
job opportunities in the cities
. For example, there may less job opportunities in small towns, compared to a city
, and higher salary rates . So, people decide to move
to urban
areas for more
options and better
pay. The main problem associated with this trend, is that, the cost of living in the cities
tends to be quite high compared to the smaller towns. Therefore, once these individuals make their move, they may discover that their financial expectations may be far-fetched.Another reason why people
move
from rural to urban
areas is for a better
way of life for their family, for instance, cities
may offer better
schools, more
recreational options, as well as better
housing. However, issues may arise, because
, despite all these amenities, the family misses out on the sense of community offered by smaller towns. There is also the possibility that their children will lose their sense of belonging and cultural affiliation
as the city
tends to be multicultural.This trend of
moving
towards the cities
can offer positive and negative benefits, as the promise of a "better
life" may come at a price of adjusting culturally as well as financially. As more
and more
people consider making the move from rural to urban
life, it is important that they conduct the right research prior to weigh the pros and cons.